Alternate Beginnings

Playing around with getting into the weirdness right from the start, started on an alternate Chapter 1 which can be viewed here:
http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/chapter-1-alternative.html

Experimentation

Re-writing the beginning a bit to see if it grabs some more attention.  The update will come next week, however the basic change is Eric awaking to The Seven in his room on the first page.  The beginning is the hardest part.

In the meantime, you can read Chapter 1 and 2 as they currently exist, leave some feedback and help make it better overall.

Chapter 1 http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/chapter-01-eric.html

Chapter 2 http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/denizens-chapter-2-chosen-one.html

Structural Evolution

When I first started writing Denizens, it was in comic script form.  Not being able to find a steady artist within my price range I scrapped it and came back to it in novel form.

It started with some events that are currently in Chapter 2, but expanded upon.

Then in novel form it actually started with events that are currently planned for Chapter 3.  Out of everyone I asked to take a read and give opinion, only one responded.  He suggested that there wasn't enough background for the main character to care about him.  I re read everything and agreed with the opinion.

Now comes the problem of not much conflict in giving the character background on the first page worth (as I'm told by the same person).  As it may deter people from reading further.  Seeing as how I have over 200 viewers and no comments so far, I may have to agree with that as well.

Since this is a living novel there is bound to be evolution as part of the process.  If anyone out there is lurking about, please, don't be shy.  I would love to hear your opinions!

Chapter 1 can be read here: http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/chapter-01-eric.html

Chapter 2 can be read here: http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/denizens-chapter-2-chosen-one.html

Chapter 2 finished

Chapter 2 is finished.  Chapter 3 now in the works.

Chapter 1 can be read here: http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/chapter-01-eric.html

Chapter 2 can be read here: http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/denizens-chapter-2-chosen-one.html

Artwork - Eric

Here we have Eric Barlow drawn and colored by the great and talented Tazio Bettin.  It blatantly hints at Eric is going to become much more than a guy with weird dreams who wants to protect his friends.

Also a sneak peak at one of the first supernatural baddies Eric will encounter coming up in Chapter 3. So, enjoy the visual goodness and check out Tazio's other works here: http://sunamori.deviantart.com/

Chapter 1 can be read here: http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/chapter-01-eric.html

Chapter 2 (in progress) can be read here: http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/denizens-chapter-2-chosen-one.html

Chapter 2 Update

Added more to Chapter 2. 

Read it here:
http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/denizens-chapter-2-chosen-one.html

and read Chapter 1 here:
http://denizensrealm.blogspot.com/p/chapter-01-eric.html

Should there be character previews?

So, i have an seemingly forever growing cast of characters.  They won't all be crammed into this book, but I have a long story to tell in my world.

I have been struggling with wanting to give a sneak peak with some quick character descriptions, but then i'm afraid it will create too many spoilers.

I do have some artwork being made by an old internet illustrator friend.  One of Eric and another of a character that will appear in Chapter 3.  Soon as he is finished I will post those.  I have seen the initial sketches and they are pretty bad ass.  Just waiting for them to be colored.

So, what do you all think?  What would be good for sneak peaks without becoming too much of a spoiler?